Last working session I arrived at one of the turning points in the book. Don has revealed his idea for the business, and now he reveals to Hap why he's up there and what Don wants from him: to use his influence to recruit Bart for Don's business, Dreedle. In return, Don will promise to solve Hap's problem with the apartment.

As I see it, there are only a few important plot points that remain:
    Shaun finds out that Hap has been asked to recruit Bart, and tries to dissuade him, warning of the political implications of Dreedle.
  1. When this doesn't work, Shaun attempts to sabotage the business somehow. But he ends up getting turned around by Don, who convinces him to invest all of his nest egg, about $4 million, in the company.
  2. Seth is telling Hap to go for it. But Seth is also disgruntled that he wasn't thought to be as important as Bart to the new enterprise.
  3. Denny again speaks to Hap, holding out the possibility of an alternative that isn't so morally objectionable. It doesn't involve the possibility of riches, but it does involve Denny buying Hap's building and letting him stay there.
  4. Hap tries speaking to Bart about it, but Bart is slippery. This might be the occasion for Bart to tell his big sexy story about working at chain.com.
  5. Don asks Hap about his progress.
  6. Greg can't believe Hap is even hesitating.
  7. Hap decides he's not going to try to use his influence with Bart anymore, in fact decides to take Denny's offer.
  8. Denny informs Hap that he's decided not to pursue the wi-fi thing, to go with Don instead. This is where I bring in the "Citizen Kane" reference.
After that I'm not quite sure what the resolution is. Man, that's a lot of scenes... I'm going to have to write more than one a day if I'm going to finish this in another 5 writing sessions.

Better get to it. I've wasted two hours and I have to stop by 5:00.

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